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Oy, the format makes it bloody difficult to read. ^_^'' Perhaps simply single space, double between paragraphs...? But as to the piece itself-- you've begun with dialogue, which naturally is ...

Ciao Adam. ^_^ I'll be brief, as weariness has my thoughts skipping the surface of lucidity and it seems Bubbles has gotten quite a bit of both technical aspects and ...

'Lo Aet. ^_^' Brief critique--points on punctuation first, I suppose and the nearer to superficial bits... Habitual Commas and Such I might just leave this a title. ^_^ Simply, you've ...

Hey Jack. ^_^ I may be less than helpful constructively. But I had to make a note -- this was brilliant. You've drawn simply what is so easily stumbled through ...

Merely for the word 'squirkie', yes? ^_^ I assume this doesn't go on endlessly; but 'twould be hilarious to have a Neverending Empress Kat saga going on YWS. ^_^ It's ...

Privyet, Claudya. ^_^ To begin-- LINE AND LINES...[of linr-by-line interlude] : Perhaps because he was being taken to the same place:[STRIKE] his [/STRIKE]death. Perhaps, for emphasis and precision -

Hullo Gyr. ^_^ ...I've fallen behind in reading Thrall - rather behind in critiques. to be tangential. But I wanted to hit this last installment, if possible. Brief thoughts, da? ...

'Lo Tinny. ^_^ All for the Positive -- first impression is simply brilliant entry . I enjoyed the thing on each level, and you hit quite a few, pulling depth ...

Oy, the final remarks set up as a poem are more than clever. You've got double-meanings and depth in the best possible way. Brevity with thought - soul of wit, ...

Are these three excerpts then, the three branches or paths the story might take? In the end, I think you'll have to choose yourself. ^_^ Ah, but for advice ... ...

'Lo Stillgrave, There's something peaceful about the narrative here, bordering archaic in tone and atmosphere, beginning quietly. Honestly, it's neatly done on almost all points. Noting that it is the

[spoiler]I have to agree about the epiolgue, but I can see what it was necessary. Ok, what confused me? Wasn't Harry named Teddy's godfather? Then why wasn't Teddy with the ...

Hey Kitty, Ack, don't not enter. Frankly, a comedic piece of detective fiction would be great - I doubt if there will be many. ^_^' But as to the piece: ...

'Lo Sumi, Honestly, I like this even more the third time reading through - it was a great entry (and made judging bloody hard...^_~). I have very little terribly constructive ...

Bent, I understood your poem just fine and, as mentioned before, I found it humourous but I agree that it's a little 'wordy.' I wasn't familiar with the term before ...